When I was in third grade I wrote a short story that has been crossing my mind as of late. So I decided to dig it out.... Hope you likeeee. Here it is, unedited, in all its third grade glory.
The Mosquito that Buzzes in Peoples' Ears
by a third grade Laura Nelson
One night I was fast asleep in my bed when a mosquito buzzed past my ear. I thought it was airplane flying through my bedroom! I went downstairs. I got a drink of water and went to the bathroom then I went back to bed. I fell asleep. The mosquito buzzed by my ear, again it was so loud I thought it was an airplane. I woke up again. I went to my mom's room I layed beside her. The mosquito buzzed by her ear. She thought it was an airplane going past her ear! Soon, the mosquito buzzed past everyone's ears. We were all awake. Then we decided to go for a drive and get ice cream cones. We didn't know it, but guess what? The mosquito got in the car too! The mosquito buzzed past my dad's ear (while he was driving) and he thought it was an airplane fly by the car. He got scared, and we got in an accident. Ice cream got all over the car but everyone was okay except the mosquito. He got smushed in one of the cookies in my cookies 'n cream ice cream cone.
What makes this story even better are the comments given by my teacher. She said "Great use of sequence and humor. I enjoyed your story-very imaginative." Do you think she was referring to the fact that I told this story as a play by play--I got a drink. I fell back asleep. I ended this blog...
2 comments:
HAHAHAHA!!!
I wrote a poem when I was like 14 years old that said:
The sky was gray
And I was blue
There is more to it, of course, but I was certain that the play off of the colors was seriously poetic.
At least your excuse was that you were 8 years old.
Okay, you inspired me to go find that poem. Here it is: (I was really 13. Thank goodness I dated it)
"I Need You"
The clouds were grey and I was blue,
I was so lonely and I needed you.
You didn't know I prayed at night,
for strength to know what was right.
To leave to stay, should I go?
I probably will never know.
You didn't know I was sad,
you only cared that you were glad.
You crushed my heart in two,
You never cared that I needed you.
That is from the 13 year old Ambi who, apparently, was already jaded by boys.
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